Destructoid wrote:I think it's pretty cool, a penny that gives you explosive brain tumors. On your word choice, try not to use contractions, and you should replace transpire with emits. For the electromagnetic "wands", pennies don't get picked up by magnets, so it should be some sort of grabber arm. There should also be an explanation as to why random gamma rays cause random exploding brain tumors. I thought it was pretty good. Some scary backstory and head explosions in the recovery logs should make it better.
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The main focus of the article would be in its 'breach'. In reality, it's a penny that gives you, as you said, explosive brain tumors. Not really scary when locked in an underground safe. But when it's carried around the country by dozens, then hundreds, then thousands of couriers? spooks. It's just an average penny, you'll never know what hit you before you spend it to another unsuspecting person.
It slep time bunner.