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				I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:23 am
				by chris0matic
				So I made a creepy pasta yesterday because I was bored, and I honestly think I did a decent job with it. Please tell me what you think!
Read the creepypasta here: 
http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/That_ ... You_Forget 
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:41 am
				by ApplePiah
				It's supposed to be He not he.
he took a thin bottle
But you know the itch around your body? That's the normal itch
99.9/100 for that one mistake.
I really liked the story as it sounds like something that really could happen IRL. I also dare you to make a SCP.
 
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:53 am
				by chris0matic
				I have, I put it on a forum or something, but it was about an extremely heavy bottle filled with sand, and when opened in a confined space, it would pour out sand, constantly, suffocating the person that opened it, and it would lock the doors around it or some sheet.
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 3:01 am
				by ApplePiah
				Number please?
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 3:44 am
				by chris0matic
				ApplePiah wrote:Number please?
It wasn't on the real wiki, it was on like a side page for others to look about
 
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 7:05 am
				by Precipitator
				Read it for a bit and looked at it... Seem pretty frikqn terrifying except some spelling mistakes/typos
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 1:24 pm
				by ApplePiah
				Oh I see... It's a draft.
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 6:40 pm
				by Oskar-PL
				Not bad  

 
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Wed Aug 06, 2014 8:41 pm
				by drmong
				Not bad, buddy ;) Keep writing
			 
					
			
				Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)
				Posted: Wed Aug 06, 2014 9:20 pm
				by chris0matic
				thanks, should I stick with it in the future?