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I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:23 am
by chris0matic
So I made a creepy pasta yesterday because I was bored, and I honestly think I did a decent job with it. Please tell me what you think!

Read the creepypasta here: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/That_ ... You_Forget

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:41 am
by ApplePiah
It's supposed to be He not he.
he took a thin bottle
But you know the itch around your body? That's the normal itch

99.9/100 for that one mistake.

I really liked the story as it sounds like something that really could happen IRL. I also dare you to make a SCP.

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 2:53 am
by chris0matic
I have, I put it on a forum or something, but it was about an extremely heavy bottle filled with sand, and when opened in a confined space, it would pour out sand, constantly, suffocating the person that opened it, and it would lock the doors around it or some sheet.

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 3:01 am
by ApplePiah
Number please?

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 3:44 am
by chris0matic
ApplePiah wrote:Number please?
It wasn't on the real wiki, it was on like a side page for others to look about

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 7:05 am
by Precipitator
Read it for a bit and looked at it... Seem pretty frikqn terrifying except some spelling mistakes/typos

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 1:24 pm
by ApplePiah
Oh I see... It's a draft.

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 6:40 pm
by Oskar-PL
Not bad :wink:

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Wed Aug 06, 2014 8:41 pm
by drmong
Not bad, buddy ;) Keep writing

Re: I made a creepy pasta! (Please give feedback!)

Posted: Wed Aug 06, 2014 9:20 pm
by chris0matic
thanks, should I stick with it in the future?