Re: SCP Forum Roleplay (V2.0): OOC Discussion

#42
This is probably going to be the worst one here, but what the hell.

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Name:
Connor (Parchezzi [Proun: Par-Chez-ee]) Traymous -- (Prefers to be called "47" or "Parchezzi")

Years at Facility:
4

Race/Species:
Unknown (Nationality)/Human

Age:
48

Appearance(optional):
Traymous wears a Black dyed Lab-Coat with only one tailored button, is bald, has Icy-Blue/Gray-ish eyes. He is 6' 4" with Black Suit-Like Dress shoes. Has the look (and attitude) of being "Pissed off" when not. Has Black-Colored Eye-Brows, showing that if he did have hair, it would most likely be black, or dark brown. Appears to be very strong.

Extra Info:
Parchezzi dislikes, if not hates almost all foods. Mostly likes apples. Parchezzi is a "wiz" with computers, and knows his way around them well. He is unbelievably sneaky, and is able to hide, even in the most unlikely spots. He can disguise himself well.

Parchezzi is handy with a gun, but does not carry one. He does, however, carry "Piano Wire" (A type of Garrote) with him at all times. This is finished with two handles, and is not metallic.
Due to an Incident with three (3) Guards near his office, Parchezzi now wears a light, bullet proof vest under his Lab-Coat and his white shirt.

Parchezzi is Anti-Social. He doesn't like to talk, but can carry a conversation on if he needs too. He claims to be brave, and to have "Saved many lives".

Lucky number is 47.

Department: Scientific and Lab-Research.
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Tell me if I need to work on anything.

Re: SCP Forum Roleplay (V2.0): OOC Discussion

#44
Spoiler
After the third attempt, Parchezzi was shot two times in the arm, and chest.
Doctors aren't as disposable as D's, Syphen. They aren't going to just get shot out of the blue.

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Omniary: fuck you anglerfish can't smell
Dr. Trialtrex21: how you know bitch
Omniary: it probably could smell you though
could probably smell your fucking dank ass nasty powersuit structure gel trog ass enslaved protein bullshit sloshing in your suit from a mile away

Re: SCP Forum Roleplay (V2.0): OOC Discussion

#47
Hakkla wrote:Is this serious, semi-casual (whatever the fuck that means to you - to me it's nonsense), or just for shit and giggles? The IC thread is already sporting meta-nudges and I'm seeing it spiralling down into a bunch of comical shenanigans at the Foundation/SCP Foundation Forum *nudge-nudge* *giggle-giggle*.

Don't get me wrong, you decide however you want it to be, but I personally won't be interested if I suspect my posts, which I would obviously invest time into (because I'm interested in a good story), were to be lost in a flurry of cheap in-jokes and one-liners.
It's supposed to be serious.

Re: SCP Forum Roleplay (V2.0): OOC Discussion

#48
hug0905 wrote:trex

y u delete my post on ic thread?
To answer this question, I must give a big round of CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM, and point out EVERY THING WRONG WITH YOUR POST!

1. You used SCP-000-J and utilized it horribly. Your post was very similar to a "lost episode" creepypasta, in that it takes a light-hearted, fun thing and throws blood on it to make it seem scary, when really it's just lazy writing and doesn't even make sense.

2. Your character was too British.

3. Your post was completely out of the blue with no buildup what-so-ever and was rather pointless.

4. Your character is too British.

5. Your character signed up to work for the SCP foundation, and yet a little ordinary murder like that caused him to lose consciousness for 30 HOURS. HOW DOES THAT EVEN WORK?

6.Your character will be too British.

7. In regards to your character app, how does somebody survive being attacked by SCP-096? The whole point of the SCP is that once you're a target, you are doomed to die no matter what. Your character should be dead.

8. YOUR CHARACTER IS TOO FREAKING BRITISH!

I want you to consider the mistakes you made and learn from them, for yours and everyone's sake.

Kids, don't do school, stay in drugs.

Re: SCP Forum Roleplay (V2.0): OOC Discussion

#49
hug0905 wrote:trex

y u delete my post on ic thread?
Okay, I'm going to ripof- I mean take after Awesome and criticize your post.

It was horrible. No offense but it was really REALLY bad. Why you ask? Well, one, your character is annoying. Like Awesome said, he's too British. He literally said "OI" at the beginning of EVERY SINGLE SENTENCE he spoke.

Two, he passed out for 30 hours. THAT'S OVER A DAY, AND IT'S IMPOSSIBLE. I mean, yeah, seeing a man dismembered is traumatizing but my god, he deals with shit like this on a daily basis, and you can't be unconscious for 30 fucking hours solely because you saw something gruesome.

Three, don't use JOKE SCPS as the central antagonists. Gotta give you props for not using an overused SCP though.

Four, if he was unconscious for 30 hours, that means he'll be absent for the entirety of the RP, or at least the first act, so what's the point of even participating if you incapacitated your character THE FIRST POST?

Five, you shoe-horned the gore in there.

Six, this is supposed to be a casual post with very little chaos, mainly just character interaction. Beginning the RP with a guy getting dismembered isn't very casual.

Seven and finally, you lacked detail. All you said was "he was getting dismembered." You should've gone into much deeper, describing the murder inside and out like "Harris froze dead in his tracks, not able to comprehend what he witnessed. A group of burly men, mercilessly tearing Dr. [REDACTED] apart limb by limb. The sickening RIP of his muscle tissue and gory fizz of his blood spewing out made Harris nearly throw up his lunch. And somehow worst of all, the men were completely emotionless, didn't even possess the ravenous and blood-lusting smirk of a barbarian. Just as clinical at every other sociopath at this hellhole." THAT'S how you RP.

All in all, your post was bad and it was the polar opposite of what the RP was about, which was why it was deleted. Thank you for being a good sport, though. Certain assholes would've been crying and complaining if their post was deleted.