http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/scp-1340
I know this is probably way to far for my first SCP, but could some people give their opinion on it?
Re: I have begun work on my first SCP. (Critique needed!)
#2It is good, but needs less "SCP-1340" and more "The Subject, The Object" that stuff
Re: I have begun work on my first SCP. (Critique needed!)
#4Alright edited a bit.
Also, for those wondering what SCP-1340 might look like, picture a skinny, and tall version of Azog from the Hobbit (movie) with no facial features except for a mouth and ears, along with the slits that emit SCP-1340-2 on its chest.
Also, for those wondering what SCP-1340 might look like, picture a skinny, and tall version of Azog from the Hobbit (movie) with no facial features except for a mouth and ears, along with the slits that emit SCP-1340-2 on its chest.
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#5Keep working on it, i don't have a rounded opinion yet!
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Re: I have begun work on my first SCP. (Critique needed!)
#6Remember that the community generally frowns upon humanoids as your first SCP.
So it has to be realllllllly good.
So it has to be realllllllly good.
Re: I have begun work on my first SCP. (Critique needed!)
#7Save this for later and combine sentences/shorten them. The community hates when your first is humanoid, unless it's the next 173 or something. Your wording is a little awkward and drags at times, it's disconnected and doesn't flow well and the beginnings aren't varied. I do like the idea as it's quite unique thugh, keep working on it and make your very first some kind of anomalous rock to ease the community into you.
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#8They hate humanoids why?
And does this mean if I joined and submitted my vengeful child thing I'd be rejected?
And does this mean if I joined and submitted my vengeful child thing I'd be rejected?
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#9They hate humanoids that aren't done well. Unless it's VERY good, then it will be downvoted into oblivion. It's not like there isn't good and enjoyable humanoids (Able has a lot of upvotes and of course there's 106). Humanoids are tough, hence why they discourage first-time writers not to make it their first SCP article.Glitch wrote:They hate humanoids why?
And does this mean if I joined and submitted my vengeful child thing I'd be rejected?
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Re: I have begun work on my first SCP. (Critique needed!)
#10It is ok, but the way it is, and without more "meat" to the document, I don't think it will survive the critical population of the SCP website.
It is just basically straight forward a dangerous, humanoid, beast-like SCP, there really isn't much about it. It doesn't cross "the Abel line" so it isn't an X-man like humanoid SCP (I once read an article about SCPs and it used those exact words, at a time at least) ,but I still don't see anything that makes it stand out besides the fact that you made something by combining a beast, Azog, and slender man into one being.
edit: although I might know one way it could work.
It is just basically straight forward a dangerous, humanoid, beast-like SCP, there really isn't much about it. It doesn't cross "the Abel line" so it isn't an X-man like humanoid SCP (I once read an article about SCPs and it used those exact words, at a time at least) ,but I still don't see anything that makes it stand out besides the fact that you made something by combining a beast, Azog, and slender man into one being.
edit: although I might know one way it could work.